When thinking about a special food about my family, the first thing that pops into my head is the way my mom cooks her spaghetti. I don't know weather it's because I think that the sauce it's self makes my mouth water or if it's because the first bite of the somewhat luscious piece of goodness just leaves you wanting more. But, I really think it's just the smile I see on my mom's face when i see her cooking some of her favorite dish. "cooking is my passion" my mom would say "I like seeing people enjoy my food". We both agree that what makes her version so unique is the fact that she adds perfectly sliced hot dogs and fresh cut tomato's.
I found out that my mom has been cooking spaghetti for a while now. She says that before we came to the state of Hawai'i or before we were even born that she would cook more frequently. She was even known as the cook in the family. That's kind of hard to believe considering I see her in the kitchen most of the time even with her busy schedule. I also found out that I'm not the only one that enjoys her spaghetti. "I remember all of your cousins back home in the Philippines during party's and other special occasions running towards the food table and before the rest of us adults could even have a chance of taking a glance at the food, it was gone. even the spaghetti".
I like how you used you and your mom's connection with her spaghetti and why's it really special to you. Something that would improve your essay would be to add more specific details/adjectives to make the story more interesting, correct your punctuation errors,and make sure that you have clear sentences that don't go on and on. Good job though! :)
ReplyDeleteYour beginning sentence makes it seem like your topic is spaghetti, but remember it isn't. The topic is a dish that is special to you, so it shouldn't be when thinking about spaghetti, it should be when thinking about a special dish to my family. There is a lot that you need to explain, you mentioned that before she came to the states...well where was she before "the states" or hawaii." You also need to talk about why it is so special to you, what you like most about it besides hot dogs and tomatoes. please be more complete in your ideas and discussion.
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